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juliet01
Mercedes Doran
United States, KS, South hutchinson

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my fairytale

i guess i thought you could change. i was wrong to believe that you could! why did i have to be so stupid?! i should have listened to my friends, after all they know best. it seems when we were "us" that i was in a dream, more so a fairytale. where i got my happy ending, everything i always wanted. yet now looking back, it only seems as if it was a horror. the tragic end, what i did. i can only hope to forget! however so, there is still some of you left in me. somehow, i can't find it, but i can feel it. i wish it would just go away! all those times with you, all those memories, bring tears to my eyes that fall like rain. i wnat it to stop and to come to an end! i want you out of my head! crying for hours brings no help, because soon they'll turn into days. you hurt me bad, more than you'll ever know, and now i'm stuck with yet another curse.

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Comment by: - 2007-05-24 12:57
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Want me to break his legs? heh. Relish it, if you can. Inspiration can come from pain....true pain...not just the illusion of it.
MatthewMarquis Comment by: MatthewMarquis - 2007-05-23 13:32
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You've got one typo: first word, seventh sentence.

This is very heartfelt and sorrowful. More of a confessional than a short story - or a journal entry. But it evokes sympathy from the reader. The only thing that was a problem for me was your not using capital Is. I found it very distracting and it actually makes the piece difficult to read.

Good job, though.
MaRiAh EsTeP Comment by: MaRiAh EsTeP - 2007-05-23 10:58
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it's not your fault. he has a way of casting a spell on girls, and you fell for it. we all have.
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