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GreenIce
Green Ice
United States, California, Ventura County

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Adieu

Adieu



One more drink and I'll be fine

A word from you and I'll decline

If you stand in front of my eyes

You'll see it's you I despise



I hate you with such passion

That not even I could ration

I'm consumed with the knowledge

You're the cause of this cutting edge




Please suffocate or find your death

{I whisper under my breath}

I feel betrayed, I stand inside

Our ten years that died




Why do I have such malice?

(in this lonely palace}

The want to torture; till it ends

Raptures and transcends




I've never been a fighter

Just mostly words; a writer

But something inside has changed

Thoughts and feelings rearranged




A feeling comes when you're near

It's almost too much; severe

He left, she left and so did you

For something else to pursue




In between a dream and reality

Is where I find my mentality

Because of you I'm not sure

If I can find a cure




Don't worry; I'm about done

And yet haven't even begun

He left, she left and so did you

It's like a permanent tattoo

(that bids adieu)

(Oh yea, and fuck you)

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kc0003 Comment by: kc0003 Online- 2008-09-10 05:23
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great ending to this one...
GreenIce Comment by: GreenIce - 2007-08-26 16:53
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Aaw. Thank you Damien Dread. I am so glad you can relate. I love relating to people about my poetry and theirs. I am glad you took the time to send a comment my way... thanks again. :)
DamienDread Comment by: DamienDread - 2007-08-26 01:54
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" I've never been a fighter Just mostly words; a writer
But something inside has changed Thoughts and feelings rearranged "
I can relate to these lines. It wasn't until I realised that anything worth having you most certainly have to fight for, did I change my mind set .
D.dread
GreenIce Comment by: GreenIce - 2007-06-05 13:35
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I am still pissed...and this poem fuels my anger everytime......only time will tell...if I can drop this anger.....
ravenheart99 Comment by: ravenheart99 - 2007-06-05 09:15
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holy shit, that last line was fuckin awesome! that one put a smile on my face.
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