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Pretty Little Thing
This is a pretty little thing,
so fragile in ones hands and unbreakable in an others.
Radiating an inner light that slowly pulses and revolves
with a warm yellow glow.
Others played with it carelessly, threw it around and dropped it.
unbreakable in their hands.
I snatch it from them; this pretty little thing fascinates me.
I study it and slowly run my fingers along its edges,
say how beautiful it is and what it means to me.
Turning it over in my hands I caress and nurture it.
The radiance intensifies as I love and care for it for months.
One day it slowly opens up revealing a more intricate layer,
beauty and passion; intertwined lovers.
The pretty little thing falls down in slow-motion
as I pull my hands away in fright.
Shattering.
I scope up the pieces and tend to its ills.
I repair and nurture it to its former beauty,
identical.
After a while it opens up again,
beauty, passion and understanding; the child of the lovers.
I gather the pieces for a second time and the process is repeated.
In a final bid to be understood it flourishes open.
This time I don't pick up the pieces,
yet it rebuilds itself, quicker than the previous times.
sturdier design and more beautiful than before,
it didn't need me, this pretty little thing.
'That's not true, I needed you.
You showed me how beautiful I could be to someone'
says the pretty little thing looking at me.
A smile sneaks itself up onto my face as I gaze into blue-grey eyes.
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oh, this is so pretty! It definately made me smile as I read it. I wish I could write like that!
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Comment by: Teri - 2006-08-21 08:01
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| Beautiful, Nick! As Tom wrote, I love how you go from something flower-like to shattered, and the ambiguity is a wonderful ride! Thank you for this. :) |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-19 22:44
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i just wanted to tell you that i really enjoyed reading your writing.
??That??s not true, I needed you.
You showed me how beautiful I could be to someone? that line hit. |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-25 15:37
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Brilliant in many ways. The use of colour and strength contrasted with the gray eyes and fragility give this
"pretty little thing" much depth. I love the persistant
nurturing until the "pretty little thing" became independently
beautiful and grateful to have been cared for so lovingly. |
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Comment by: Tom - 2006-02-07 12:55
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Great piece, it's so ambigious! There is the whole plant-esque imagery at the start, provoking images of flower (pretty little thing), and then from "shattering" it starts to get more interesting :) This is my fav of the pieces I have read by you...
The only thing I would change is the use of "it" - i know it adds to the overall ambiguity etc, but in the second stanza you use "it" in every line....
Semi colon after "beauty" in the third stanza?
I assumed, from the last line you are referring to a person, as the pretty little thing...which is great, well I suppose you could say, de-personification - you also create a distance from your object whilst still being desperately close...
I thought this piece was fab, especially "I scope up the pieces and tend to its ills." - i have never seen scope used in that way :) Impressive throughout!
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