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Pixie Dust
You were fun to be with
Flying away your worries
Always happy, carefree
In love
Peter
Then she came and flew
To Neverland, stole you
I was first
banished me
replaced
I hurt by your dismissal
My wings withered slowly
My heart broke
You're mean
Dust
Hook gave comfort and compassion
Understood me, comforted me
Locations of you
I divulged
Revenge
I was tricked, silly me!
You are in danger
Peter Pan, run!
Listen now!
Boom!
Save the children from Hook
Even her I envy
My pixie dust
You need
Hero!
Now we are together again
I am extremely joyful
She's back home
Who cares?
Jealousy?
I wonder if Hook is alive
That croc fancies him
Another hand bitten?
Poor Captain
Pity
We lay on a branch
I danced on your hand
I shake glitters
Light up!
Moon
Oh Peter, my Peter Pan
I belong to you
Just hold me
Am always
Tinkerbell
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| so unique and creative! This was a clever idea. I LOVE TINKERBELL! I don't have any suggestions to make- this is written so well. |
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| OMG. I'm not sure how you did that because it looks so simple on the page but works really really well. Great stuff |
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| i love it.. you created a structure with words and lines.. awesome |
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| Very interesting and playful. I like how simple the whole thing is in both structure and vocabulary, exhibiting the childlike innocence of both Tinkerbell and the island. The Lost Boys aren't the only ones who haven't grown up. I was also intrigued by the brief glimpses of a more mature Tinkerbell, wondering what has happened to Captain Hook. Very well done. |
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Really liked the form and style of the piece. Not only does it look nice, it sounds so. I can't say that I have any suggestions. I would call this a great poem. Maybe there could be another stanza about how bad tink feels, but it's not necessary.
Thanks for the read. |
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