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crystaltest
Crystal Test
United States, IL, Peoria

Words: 222
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Comments: 6

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3:33 a.m.

I'm awake.

In the blinding blackness, I sit up and glance in the direction of the alarm clock. The bright red numbers glaringly tell me it's 3:33 a.m. Work is only four short hours away. I know better than to drink a large glass of milk before bed. What was I thinking?!

Frustrated with myself and my bladder, I move to the side of the bed and set my feet on the slickness of the hardwood floor. I stand up and sleepily stumble towards the door. I am silently cursing my husband for unconsciously leaving his shoes directly in my path. Still slightly disoriented, I know I reach the bathroom when I feel the cold ceramic tile under my feet. Stepping further in, the moonlight from the window outlines the white stool.

After going to the bathroom, I head back to bed. I might as well catch a few more Z's if possible, I think to myself. As I lie back, the sheets are cool, almost cold, to my skin. I feel heat coming from my husband, as he lays on the other side of the bed. I roll over and snuggle up to his warmth. I close my eyes and quickly start to nod off.

I'm awake.

I realize my husband is on 3rd shift this week.

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Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-04-28 12:49
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I think there is something you are leaving out. There is an acorn here which needs to grow into an oak.
Shadowdancer Comment by: Shadowdancer - 2007-07-22 22:12
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This was very cool. It's called 3:33 and there's exactly 222 words in it.
Comment by: - 2007-05-29 11:12
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Great concept. The ending could smack a little harder though IMO.

I'm awake.

My heart is slamming my chest like a hammer. Adrenaline surges as I remember, my husband is working 3rd shift all this week.
kcollett Comment by: kcollett - 2007-05-29 11:05
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What a teaser, I wanted more. Great build up to the start of a suspense.
brad19 Comment by: brad19 - 2007-05-28 22:12
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Yeah, was her husband there or on the shift at the time? Spooky anyway. I loved it, the use of tone and narrative was great. I loved it.
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