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Dead Dog in the Bronx
There is a dead dog in the Bronx
It is winter,
his long body stretched out
pulled from both ends
of good and evil between
Prospect avenue and Longfellow.
I shiver at the sight,
his snout
frozen from the snow,
he will no longer snort,
and will not miss it.
There is a dead dog in the Bronx
His mouth is open,
but he produces no stench,
and his silence is deafening.
His eyes are bulging,
but he cannot see,
and he cannot cry.
There is a dead dog in the Bronx
Once, someone's pet,
he gave love and comfort,
he gave pain and grief.
There is a dead dog in the Bronx
Open your eyes
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Did a real dead dog inspire this? You see them on the side of the road and wonder who will stop to remove them. Or, you see the crows and turkey buzzards pecking at them-gross
Makes me feel sad; it could be a stray who ran out of luck. |
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| I really like this one. The imagery is fantastic, and the last line opens the imagination. Great work. |
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| You really have a knack for allowing the reader of your stories to look through your eyes, and isn't that the point of writing? Great read. |
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This is very good and quite poignant. I too think the repetition is effective, and whether you look at this as a metaphor or literally, both work well.
First stanza, prospect = Prospect? |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-05-29 11:14
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The last line really wrapped up this poem perfectly.
I think we walk around with blinders on so that we only see or hear what we want to, and discard anything that might make us have to do something to connect with each other.
I liked the repition of the one line. I think it worked well.
A few line breaks may make this a little more smooth to read.
For example:
I shiver at the sight,
his snout
frozen from the snow,
he will no longer snort,
and will not miss it.
Hope that helps.
Sheri** |
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