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Ethgar
Ethgar Rios
United States, NJ, Kearny

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Nirvanic Interlude

She ascends the ocean sky
goddess of roar
crash and white surf
at our feet

her pale beams
bathe us bare
skin so similar
baptism of my
rebirth
miracle magnified
on wet mirrors
-your stare

and I swear
we would soar
slaves to the
silent whim
of the wind
were it not for
the reins of fingers
yanking the anchors
of my youth
innocent
naked

your smile is
lucid language
soliciting lungs
to swell with life
and exhale
to the tremor
of stiff
red curls
brilliantly opaque
like copper flowers
fit as a final
gift for my
empty
mausoleum

resurrection rushes
swifter than the sea
slips the sand
from my soles
and I suppose
the purpose
of any
single grain
was placed
for perfection.

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Like many on this site, I am a self proclaimed hopeless romantic plagued by tragic consequences... last but not least of which culminated at the hands of an ex-fiancé who secretly pursued a career as an exotic dancer. Sometimes we feel dead, and still, like a seed in the desert sand awaiting water, we long to be reborn. This second wind of the soul is precisely what I aspire to capture in this simple verse.

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Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-07-06 12:32
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wow !!! Wonderful. I love your style of writing with vivid images. Your words are so beautiful.......

your smile is
lucid language
soliciting lungs
to swell with life
and exhale
to the tremor
of stiff
red curls
brilliantly opaque
like copper flowers
fit as a final
gift for my
empty
mausoleum

Keep up the good work

Anne
PANeufeldt Comment by: PANeufeldt - 2007-06-13 10:56
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I can relate to some of that history and the feelings it inspires. A rebirth is fondly desired, its a painful delivery though when the labor and attending physician are all one's self. Beautiful stuff, tragedy and romance fuel your words well, particularly here:

"and I swear
we would soar
slaves to the
silent whim
of the wind
were it not for
the reins of fingers
yanking the anchors
of my youth"
rabableo Comment by: rabableo Online- 2007-06-07 11:08
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I simply love the words you use and how you weave into the essence of your poem. Beautiful. The images are so vivid and perfect that they made me feel what you express here. I enjoyed this piece, Ethgar. Hope you find what (or who) you're looking for. :)

Thanks for sharing.
hatchzel Comment by: hatchzel - 2007-06-04 20:43
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not just a great comeback but AMAZINg! I'm glad you're back and hope you stick around. It is only Roy that I often have the pleasure of "talking" to through our works. And you know how Roy is, our conversations can be prettyy hilaarious:) This piece is so sweet, nostalgic and romantic. You're a hopeless romantic and I am a hopelsss nostalgic.


your smile is
lucid language
soliciting lungs
to swell with life



I Love This one and I wish someone can say it to me. Can you please tell me where you come up to weave such eloquent words.


Just glad you're back
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2007-06-02 19:57
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Your poem reaches out and touches the reader's heart. The descriptions come alive with vivid imagery, rich in detail, and it ends just as it begins in original metaphors. Just beautiful, Ethgar.
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