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Beck
Dan Beck
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My Moth

Soft, silver rays through
a moonlit shutter,
a dream with a needle
stuck in vinyl fissures.

A broken bubble
refuses to burst,
a human wick,
a fading flame
of emerald eyes.
I wait with baited,
dancing arms of gold.

The familiar flutter
of your wings,
whispering
their words,
hiding in the
scraps and weeds,
an angel's lament among
the unfathomable
silence of things.

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TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2008-08-09 17:03
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a beautiful piece - you have a way of writing that is instantly calming, and somehow romantic in the gentleness of tone. And the ending sends it strait home into the readers mind. Beautiful
Kav Comment by: Kav Online- 2008-07-02 04:45
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Great poem Dan. Loved the use of imagery, which really draws you into your writing

Nicely done
Kavita
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-11-21 00:08
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Awesome piece of writing from beginning to end.
Jane Bowyer Comment by: Jane Bowyer - 2007-07-26 11:28
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I really liked this poem. I felt I went off to somewhere else whilst reading it. It's a great piece of work.
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-07-03 23:44
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lovely poem. Everyone has said what needs to be said about it and I cannot add anymore.

Nice work
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