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Bloomingmaddness
Tameron D. Brathwaite
United States

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Demon Of Hell

On broken bended knees,
with no place to dwell,
the everlasting being fell.

In a puddle of blood,
surrounded by beast,
she drank with the demons of hell.

In a ballroom of fire and gore,
singing, laughing,
and being a whore,
she danced with the demons of hell.

On a bed of lava with piles of sores,
with fourteen beasts,
and two other whores,
she became a demon of hell.

In a dress of black,
and ring of spikes,
she married the devil himself.

(c)1999 Tameron Brathwaite

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lyrically yours Comment by: lyrically yours - 2007-10-11 04:51
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A very descriptive piece, eye-catching and lyrically well-written
ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-07 13:36
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Excellent rhythm.
The imagery is outrageous and extremely vivid.

I love the lines

with fouteen beasts
and two other whores

I don't think it ever would have occured to me to put that particular combination of words together. I love it.

I enjoyed reading.
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-06-08 14:47
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Wow Tam, love the imagery in the 4h stanza. "on a bed of lava with piles of sores.." eww......but great image...deep dark and troubling. I think you can exclude himself at the end, leaving it with just the "devil" expresses finality, sounds more polished. Take it or trash it, Sash
insightariot Comment by: insightariot - 2007-06-07 08:27
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Feeling the dark fire...I like the rhythm and the word placement...
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