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teengonebad
David Colombini
United States, new jersey, holmdel

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Crossroads

Which way shall I go?
Should I go left? Right? Straight?
I'm sure you know what I'm asking.
I'm sure you can relate.

I've reached crossroads in my life.
This decision will alter my trail.
Which path will lead to success?
Which paths are of no avail?

I started this road with certainty,
With feelings of pleasure and pride.
Now, however, I'm not so sure
Because people around me have lied.

I do not know the truth
Of life from all these lies.
Now I'm very hesitant
About which path here is wise.

I know I can't go straight
Because I know I need to turn.
I cannot keep going like this
When I still have much to learn.

I know my life can be happier,
Better than the shambles it's in.
But which way is better?
My patience is wearing thin.

Left or right, I do not care
Because either way I'll get,
Problems that I'll have to fix,
Problems that I won't forget.

But I'll also get times,
Which will make me smile.
Times that I'll remember,
And cherish all the while.

So at these crossroads I am standing,
Left or right, I must choose.
Either which way, my mind is set:
Life is a battle I will not lose.

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sabihah Comment by: sabihah - 2007-06-29 00:11
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The last stanza summed the entire poem up for me. Nice flow and pace. A very honest peice, we deal with crossroads daily in life and the harsh reality is that we only realize which path was 'right' after we have decided which path to take. Thanx for sharing
sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2007-06-26 14:40
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great poem. I like how even though it's a personal crossroad that he has committed to solve, the narrator still must ask advice from someone else.

suggestions:

no comma after 'sure' in third stanza, after 'truth' and 'hesitant' in fourth stanza, after 'straight' or 'this' in fifth stanza, after 'care' in seventh stanza.
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2007-06-07 19:40
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Stanza four; second line, I would change the word "lie" since you put "lied" in the stanza above it. Eighth staza, first line, I would change "get" to "have" as it sounds smoother.
I noticed you say left or right...what about up or down? Guess that would make you bi-polar, lol. Others may identify with this as left-winged or right-winged (as in politics) and straight opposed to gay. But, it is everyone's concern which path to take when given choices.
I chose a man my age over one 24 years younger. STUPID ME! But...my path seems to be on a one way street, no turning back. I liked the easy rhyming.
Comment by: - 2007-06-07 19:26
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A nice poem. Flowed smoothly and retained the sense of hope and realization. Good job. Sorry that I can't critique it better but I'm not a poet, just if I like it or not.
solwolf Comment by: solwolf - 2007-06-05 14:20
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Very nice. Are you the next Robert Frost???? Keep writing sir.
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