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Jim Steele
James Flynn
United Kingdom, London

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Those Days

You were twenty
You were so pretty
I think I was thirty five
Minutes late

You were so angry
You still looked so pretty
I said sorry
I'd made you wait

All that night we made love
Making love was enough
In those days

There was a taxi
Somewhere in Picadilly
Things kinda got silly
Driver kicked us out

We didn't get angry
Thought we were in a movie
Something French maybe
Letting it all hang out

Never ever knew your name
Never seemed to mind the rain
In those days

Now I'm a little older
A little bit colder
Digging through a folder
Of my memories

I found a number
Thought I'd lost forever
Thought maybe I'd try it
I just had to see

At the end of the line was a man
I couldn't make him understand
About those days

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Vision79 Comment by: Vision79 - 2008-04-21 21:18
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Neat! Such is life.
Falling Comment by: Falling - 2007-11-10 12:11
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Interesting, as you walk the reader through a lofty night of sweet youth, and as you age, the lack of spontanious is clear. The fact you tried to get that back, calling a phone number from years passed, and talking to probably her husband by then, shows just how much everyone changes. A down to earth story and sad. Aging is life. I guess your story shows we should not regret.
fureyaersoy Comment by: fureyaersoy - 2007-10-17 12:29
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This has a very nice flow, you take us with you in your voyage of memories. Lovely. Thanks for sharing
fureya
ErinJane Comment by: ErinJane - 2007-08-03 19:46
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I am glad I read this. I am glad you wrote it too.

Thanks.
stobin Comment by: stobin - 2007-06-23 02:43
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Nicely told. Memories are very special but as is shown at the end of your poem, they can't be relived. Enjoyed this very much.
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