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milner place
Milner Place
United Kingdom, West Yorkshire, Huddersfield

My Bookshop
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snapshot

sitting among vegetables
in the casbah
with mahmet
bouchaib
beni
passing round the pipe

those lettuces
man
were green
green green

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My Bookshop

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milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-06-08 01:34
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Lucy, and Costa - right on, right on. Uriah, it is meant to be very audible. Thank you all.

milner
flameof Comment by: flameof - 2007-06-07 22:14
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a sweet and uplifting morsel. I wanted to hear you read "green, green, green" out loud. Never a let down.
costa Comment by: costa - 2007-06-07 20:06
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I hope it's not just me - but this made me laugh out loud.

Love it - almost requires some sitar-heavy background music whilst reading.

Nice one - I could almost see the wisps of smoke and the cushions.

(unless i've mis-interpretated this completely and look like a fool. :)

Costa
Lucy Lepchani Comment by: Lucy Lepchani - 2007-06-07 14:16
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Heart-lifting! Makes me laugh deeply and knowingly!
milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-06-07 13:39
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Thanks, Sophia, Freda, and Rabab. I was unsure if this worked OK or no.

milner
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