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I like the new ending much more. I said to myself, 'He should of just said pigs dream of..." and trailed off just as the poem did.
The structure didnâ??t fit the title from the first line, but rather digressed from the certain, into the title. Thatâ??s very clever. It worked too. Thereâ??s a great deal packed into these few lines but it doesnâ??t leave me lost. Artful Milner. |
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Very slight modification of last line.
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Thanks Christina, you brought a bright light into a sorry day.
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Thanks, Ethgar. Iy wasn't anyone in particular, just a name that fell out of a cloud, but he has gradually gathered some sort of space and form. But then, he's who you make him, so now he's also that CP. Salud
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clear or unclear, your work always stand out and is always so well written! well done once again. I have no criticisms.
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