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bozlich
Boris G.
Australia, Melbourne

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AN ODE TO THE CENTURY PAST

That was the age of despair, disrepair
but this is now, the New Utopia.

That was the time when we killed off our muses
throwing their remains to the ravenous dogs.

Our innocence disemboweled, our hopes quartered
with five hollow-point bullets on that cold december night.

When six million replaced six six six as the accursed number
of all eternity and
six million nameless faces, six million faceless names
were extinguished for that greatest crime of all -
Existence.

But this is now, the Neo-Utopia.

That was the age of despair, disrepair
When raven-black sun
threw rays of shadow upon the earth and
giant bullfrogs ate pygmy antelopes
hooves, bones and all.

But still we fought on, hoping for meaning to appear
yet when it arrived, it was only in our dreams
dissipating as soon as we awoke and tried to grab at its
gossamer threads with our crude, clumsy hands.

And this is now, the Last Utopia.

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g9rocks64 Comment by: g9rocks64 - 2007-06-16 04:40
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What a dark feel. I agree with Micah that there definitely is a noir feel to it, especially given the subject. The ominous second and last lines feel like there are there to remind us that "history can and does repeat itself so don't feel so superior." The mixing of meter works really well for this; I think this poem is one of the best I've read from you!
MicahWachovec Comment by: MicahWachovec - 2007-06-12 14:47
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I don't know the december night you refer to but I really liked this. Rarely does a poem effectively carry a Noir-feeling. I think you did it though.

The ending of the fourth stanza has been summed as such I think. Maybe it was Weisel, I'm not sure. The opening however is utterly original and when taken as a whole sentiement is new to me.

I esspecially liked the word crude in the last stanza. Great man. Really enjoyed it and think it is of actual worth.
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