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Katelynn Matta
United States, Washington, Carson

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Angel

*Terribly short - didn't know what else to classify it as*

Her white dress blowing softly in the breeze, a single tear rolled down her cheek. Her arms hung limply at her sides, and she felt utterly alone. She hand given up on everything, life, love, happiness. He had left her, left her and never looked back. Creeping closer to the ledge, she gazed at the magnificent view of the mountains, forests, and valley the lay below. A sly and crafty river cut its way through the valley, creating a blue and grey snake. A droplet of rain drifted down to earth, and rested peacefully on her cheek. And then it came, large pellets, softly but in many numbers. She lifted her head and welcomed the cool wetness, her long black hair beginning to stick to her back and her white dress getting soaked. A voice sounded behind her, turning she saw him. It was him. The one who left her and never looked back. He was here. He reached his hand out to her, crying her name and asking, begging her to step away from edge. But she was bound and determined to find happiness, and she knew where that lay. She backed away from him, from his lies and from his wants, towards the place where she knew she would live. In eternity. Spreading her arms, she turned and floated off the edge, with all the beauty and grace of an Angel. He cried out and grabbed for her, but it was too late. She had flown out of his arms, and into the arms of Angel. She didn't die, didn't get hurt ' not even a scratch. She never landed, she only went up, up with her Angel to happiness, finding peace at last.

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Comment by: - 2007-06-16 10:49
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Ooh, I like this. Gave me little shivers at the end, there. Beautiful imagery. The shorter a piece is, I've heard, the more each word counts. You chose your words wonderfully!
Robert Barlow Comment by: Robert Barlow - 2007-06-13 21:36
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Katelynn, this is short, but it also has a lot of depth. I like how you used good description and characterization to say so much in such a small space. --Robert Barlow
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