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The first line drew me in. If that first line doesn't do it, my attention immediately starts to move on. In this case it feed hungrily on the poem. I like the poem, but the last three lines, although what you were aiming at, are too easy. OK, but too said.
excellent poem.............i like your use of rheorical question at the start of the poem because it immediately hooks the reader into the poem's context - it certainly hooked me.....
