Cause and Reason
Never was it meant to be
Unbridled thrusting and blowing
Like fierce wind through the trees
Oh, but the difficulty of it, reason
Swirling around like the leaves
Caught up, whirling of its cause
Declining the best offer, fronting
Loosened, an already weakened will
Like broken branches, falling
Afraid not of laws, nature and man
Time, robbed of it, twisting both ends
Blowing away it's cause for no reason
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"You Misunderstand Me"
I loved it! Whoa is me I am misunderstood all the time, or maybe I am not understanding them? Nope, I am sure of it, THEY are the ones mixed up! |
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| Wow..that poem is my words..every word....im sad i didnt write that..but im glad you did....its nice to know im not the only one....."disturbing regression"....perfect....just perfect.... |
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Comment by: zepol - 2007-06-22 06:54
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| Good poem, I see you dropped the word mutuality. IMHO, it works either way. You've done a nice job here. |
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Comment by: jayz73 - 2007-06-19 22:16
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| Very nice poem. However, the word "mutuality", for me at least and I don't know about anybody else, seems a little out of place in this poem. I think "empathy" or "sympathy" might make this flow better. But other than that, I like it a lot. :) |
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| Good job, my friend! I really like the first stanza. I tripped up over the line "to not, just ends up so lonely"...just didn't seem as smoothe as everything else- could have been the way I was reading it though. All in all, I liked it a lot. |
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