Ancient Weaponry vs. the Sometimes Painful but Sudden Relief of Therm-Optical Camouflage (From "The Dragon Children Gallery")
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Ancient Weaponry vs. the Sometimes Painful but Sudden Relief of Therm-Optical Camouflage (From "The Dragon Children Gallery")
(The Child as a Young Man:)
Sais & sticks
Words & swords
The three of us
& the laying of our hands
In the winterlands of the ordinary
-Invisibility & slow death-
A ribcage;
Insufficient armour
& yet
Just another obstacle
To the beholder
(In spite of the directness of his touch)
The damage done
Leaves harmless traces of mortality
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Comment by: Apollo - 2008-04-29 20:32
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| a sense of impending danger... feebleness of humanity... I like it... i did get a sort of ninja turtle vibe with the sais but I'm a product of my age group... well done |
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Comment by: - 2006-03-29 09:31
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MY GOD...REALYY long TItle..
anyway,You are a great writer...
What i like about your poem is that it is...readable...That's it...We can read and enjoy it...Not some thing old or too philosopihical...Entertaining...all in all, a wonderful read
P.S.: Care to read my Mr. Banker story...PLEASE?? |
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| Interesting point, although I do kinda like crazy long titles. If this was supposed to be a poem for reading only, I could probably skip that, though. In my mind, the titles from this play should be used perhaps in text on stage, in the scenography, and not be read aloud together with the poetry - at least not by the same person at the same age in the same way. If you get what I mean. |
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| I also felt that poem that need a very long title to set the scene or describe what's happening must be missing something vital in the actual text. But I could be wrong! |
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| I bet you are. But where did all your poetry go? |
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