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laffarsmith
Rebecca Laffar-Smith
Australia, Western Australia, Armadale

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Destiny? Doom!!!

Distance divides our heart and soul,
destiny bares the blood-filled bowl
dousing emotion with diamond shards
drawn between fate's faceless guards.
Dining on pain and dreams of tomorrow,
delving in shame and decanting in sorrow.

Drifts of sadness, silence, fatigue
dancing in shadows, secrets, intrigue.
Dark, driving rain, distant thunder
droplets of darkness, devil's plunder.
Dogmatic whispers of love's sanity,
dishonest screamings, vagrant vanity.

Dissertation dealing in death and disease
doesn't begin to dismiss or appease
dated wisdom and drowning faith
disaster, dilemma, an undying wraith.
Doom and destruction, our destined end
deep into Hades we swiftly descend.

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PhoenixTPA Comment by: PhoenixTPA - 2007-06-21 01:39
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Very powerful, passionate work. One can quickly feel our destiny is doom and gloom by becoming absorbed by the evening news or by all the negative attitudes so often portrayed on TV in our society. The line "Dining on pain and dreams of tomorrow,
delving in shame and decanting in sorrow" struck me hard; I believe human beings dwell on the past and worry about the future far too much, when in fact the greatest joy can be realized by focusing on making THIS moment the best it can be. Thank you for such a wonderful piece.
sporvirus Comment by: sporvirus - 2007-06-20 17:34
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I think I just OD'd (get it) on D's--in a good way. Funny how the consonants when stacked up like that produce movement or frustration, sometimes spittle.
Living in the USA and a perpetual student of history, I feel compelled to tell you that I see the same trends here as there were in the fall of all the great empires. Apathy and xenophobia are two of the beginning signs.
I appreciate the passion in your voice.
WHy does everything have to lead to Hades! Dammit.
Enjjoyed the rhythm of this one.

Spor
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