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Elucidate
Emma Waterfield
Canada, Ontario, Waterloo

Words: 233
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Comments: 9

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White Noise Photograph

Into the picture. Faces bleed, long aged and broken, Lives fall into disuse, pass into forgotten. Will I you forget you me? Will we all pass into the rows of the forgotten dead? Buried lives living under the damp soil. Waiting for someone to remember. To resurrect them in back mind memories. To grasp onto and hold. The want. Need to remember I You me, I wish, want, will, You I to remember. Don't let Us pass into the dead forgotten bleeding faces. Names unused with faces of the dead. Please remember. Please don't forget. Scared and soon forgotten I wait, resurrect me, remember me, my heart still beats. I am not dead yet. Save me, pull me back, breath real life into my stone bitter lips. My limbs are encased in dirt, mud holding me down; free me from my dirt prison. How it was back when my face did not bleed. My limbs encased in cloud, lifting me up. I used to fly; now I sink lower. As my life passes into disuse. Do you remember? Can you force the life of disuse into use? Con you resurrect me into clouds from dirt? Would you? Will you?

Do you have the strength to remember and hold on.
Do you want, will, wish, me to live again.
Free me
Please.
I am dying.
Forgotten.
Forget.
I want to live again.

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Dante Comment by: Dante - 2007-07-03 21:59
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I can feel the passion in reading this piece. To hell with styles and grammer...just writing what you want to. Isn't that what it's all about? I really like the "simple" line "I used to fly; now I sink lower". It's sharp and direct. Thanks for the good read.
kenikki Comment by: kenikki - 2007-07-03 16:55
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So emotional, so exact. I love it. It really speaks volumes to me as it seems like something i would write lyrically but technically you have your own style which I admire. The first part is like the rambling of subconsciousness while the sharp ending sums up the intensity of the emotion felt in the first part.
good work keep it up :)
suleem Comment by: suleem - 2007-06-27 08:53
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Hi, I too liked the way you formated your poem. It has a intensity about it.
An urgency for completion of somekind. Will look forward to more
Elucidate Comment by: Elucidate - 2007-06-27 07:51
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The title was supposed to be one that you begin to understand when reading this piece, I hope it didn't confuze people too much!
writtenontheroya Comment by: writtenontheroya - 2007-06-27 07:50
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I think I'd have to agree with Caleb, I was a little thrown off by the title at first but I really liked the actual piece. Nice work. :)
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