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CharredQuill
C. White
Australia, Victoria, Warrnambool

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Bittersweet

Under the midnight blue sky,
Into the sea of green.
Sailing the wind-swept currents
A tale of love never seen.

A kiss beneath soft lamplights,
They take a breath of air.
A dance beneath the moonlight,
Sailing without a care.

A love left uncompleted,
A child born in tears,
A rugged, unyielding passion,
It was a romance that spanned five years.

He held her in his arms,
And said that 'I am yours,'
And when he left at sunrise,
She'd give her life for one night more.

Bring me into the twilight,
And sing me a sweet song,
His arms they were her shelter,
And he could do no wrong.

With child he had left her,
A secret she would hide,
Sadly, the crew were not with her,
They were on the bosun's side.

'Mama, please don't hurt me,'
The four year-old did cry.
Held beneath the water,
Where she was left to die.

The tears rolled down her face,
Dripped down on golden sands.
Where her child was buried,
A grave tunnelled by her own hands.

A torment and a torture,
A grief she'd never known.
To this day she waits to tell him,
But far on the sea he roams.





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Once more a story about my two pirates, Lilana Annabella Fletcher, and Rafael Salvadore. About their romance and the resulting tragedy that caused Lily to murder her own baby.

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Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-09-30 02:40
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This is excellent. Tragic but grips you. Loved reading this Thank you for sharing

Anne
chibearsfan2006 Comment by: chibearsfan2006 - 2007-06-23 09:29
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this was a great read. emotion, power, the words brought it all out in this one. the tradgic ending was priceless.. i loved this poem!
krstna4943 Comment by: krstna4943 - 2007-06-23 00:09
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I thought it was worded quite beautifully. Very sad and tragic though. Great job!!
LadyEgyptia Comment by: LadyEgyptia - 2007-06-22 18:28
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Wow, you took my title and ran away with it. I LOVE this. I am honored to have inspired such a lyrical poem. I'm looking forward to reading more. Just one typo to fix - should be "ie" not "ei" in unyielding.
carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-06-22 09:27
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AARRRG, 'tis a treasure to be sure! I liked the bittersweet tone of the poem and felt the raw emotion of poor Lilana. Good work, I can't find anything to change or edit.
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