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Imagination March
Crows circled over head. Their cries were sharp, cutting through the already silenced lands. Caw'¦ caw'¦ The sun beat down through a cloudless sky on a lone figure crawling across the desert floor. Small, wasted, fragile, he clung to life. Thrust here by powers he knew naught of. This place was a place of solitude, this was a place of death. Caw'¦ caw'¦ the crow's cries grew louder. Heat rose from the bronzed sand, so hot it burned the leaves from the dying trees. Tick'¦ tick'¦ the clocks melted on rocks misshaped by harsh winds'¦ evaporated away with a slight hiss and a spot of steaming effort. Louder and louder the noises grew'¦ caw'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ tick'¦ The man threw his hands to his ears. But louder it grew yet'¦ caw'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ tick'¦ caw'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ tick'¦ Louder and louder it grew, becoming as one. Caw'¦ tick'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ They beat with rhythm now, a band marching to the tune of death'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ caw'¦ tick'¦ louder and louder'¦ until'¦ there was nothing'¦ He opened his eyes'¦ it was all in his head'¦
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It is a cycle of growth, that's my take. Crows always pull me in, deserts capture my imagination and at first mention of a figure crawling across the ground, I was curious.
Not a bad piece.
---Greg---- |
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| I can tell the writer is a very creative person, and I liked the way the tempo of the peice changed repeatedly. I didn't care for the ending though. I thought of the wizard of oz, and well...wondered "why" the events happened in the story. |
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Comment by: Somnius Online- 2007-11-09 21:31
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I actually read this a few times. My first reaction was something of confusion and disappointment, second was of indifference, and third was of some sort of sense of relation. I think this portrays the mind of a creative person that's always in and out of reality. But this piece seems so unsure of itself. Still, I want to think that this is the thoughts of a person that walks on a thin line seperating reality and fantasy.
Anyways, I like it. Very unique. I thank you for letting this be public so that I, along with others, could enjoy it. |
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| Um... yeah, I was not expecting that kinda ending... it pulls you in and then spits you out... kinda CS Lewis'ish, you know taking you in and filling your head full of something then dismissing it all as fantasy... :( |
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| I was expecting a different ending too~Very interesting. |
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