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Sabbath Nikole
Brit Graham
United States, ohio, Bellefonataine

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Now who will save me?

I'm alive now
Do you still doubt me?
This is my world now
I'm falling further away



Pushing it down
Why do we need all this?
This conscious?

This food for my soul
I'm crossing over
I'm touching your dark side
Can you help me now?

I'm going under
Drowning in my suffering
Going down
Down, down

How softly I flow
My pulse slows

Where are my saviors?
And my angel demons?
Can your angels save me now?
Cuz I'm falling
Down

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uqbahTC1 Comment by: uqbahTC1 - 2007-06-27 07:49
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Nice write! In my opinion it is well written but needs a little addition into it. Maybe work on your flow a little more but the discription is awesome
tkinnison Comment by: tkinnison - 2007-06-26 11:12
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I think you are a great writer. You have a unique style sense. I hope to read some more of your work soon.
krstna4943 Comment by: krstna4943 - 2007-06-22 23:44
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Great work. I think it was well written. It was quite visual. I enjoyed reading it.
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