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OilsandSyntax
Nikki Niswonger
United States, Ohio

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Dandelion Transformation

My brother and I
did everything together.

I watch a tiny ladybug
cling to a leaning blade of grass
in the threatening spring breeze
and I ponder,
breathing deep,
what age it is that we stop observing life
through that magic lens of wonder.
When does clinging to the grass become a burden,
instead of a swaying adventure?
Dandelion transformation
There was a time
(before the dandelion fuzz)
when we would blow against the wind
with certainty - (and inflated cheeks)
that we had just altered the course of the clouds.

There was a time
when the tropical fish on our bathtub curtain
taught us to use our imagination gills,
so we wouldn't have to worry about breathing,
or treading the waters of our daydreams,
Do gills just close up like earring holes?

There was a time
when we ignored danger.
Our small rowboat was always more fun when rocked,
joyful when we stood,
euphoric when tipped over.

There was a time
when loud wasn't embarrassing.
We would stand in our little rowboat,
pound our chests like gorillas,
yell like Tarzan,
howl at the moon,
and inhale youth,
quite certain that we would go on living just like this,
forever.

There was a time
we'd race to the water hole,
race to be naked,
(before the dandelion fuzz)
race to jump in,
I'd tease you about the fish nibblin' on your worm!
You'd tease me about splashing like a girl.

I'm not sure how long the ladybug had been gone,
but I've made up my mind.
These rusty old gills have been on dry ground too long.
I race to the pond,
peel off my clothes in the threatening Spring breeze,
cannonball into the fountain of our youth,
and inhale life,
quite certain that I'll go on living,
just like this.

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Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos Online- 2007-12-06 17:03
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There was a time
(before the dandelion fuzz)
when we would blow against the wind
with certainty - (and inflated cheeks)
that we had just altered the course of the clouds.

I love this, you are an amazing writer.
abnich Comment by: abnich - 2007-09-24 13:09
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Por mi hermana...tan bella. I love the dandelion fuzz part. Fuzz. I remember these times with nostalgia.
Dante Comment by: Dante - 2007-08-01 21:09
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Wow, reading this brought back so many memories of my childhood with my sister. It almost brings tears to the eye to think back and to look at ourselves today...how much has changed...I can really appreciate your style and will be reading more. Thanks for sharing this poem.
SanityCheck Comment by: SanityCheck - 2007-08-01 18:58
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Your best poem of yours I've read so far! Oh, how so much of that takes me back to my own childhood. Talk about a cry to action! Look at the world with new eyes (or our first ones) ... enjoy it all while we still can. I think about "gather ye rosebuds while ye may" here, in a way.

I love the wink with "before the dandelion fuzz).

Excellent!
jagainst Comment by: jagainst - 2007-06-29 16:26
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This is very lovely and whimsical, but I felt a sinking depression, a sort of longing for the better times as I read--you side-stepped that feeling with a ending of pure hope. Lovely.
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