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Whispered Words
Karen Koski
Canada, Ontario

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Steel

Whispers of a silent tear
Trickle endless to reach beyond.
Arms outstretched as the pain within grows deep
And a minuscule moment of truth ends in emptiness.
In a disarray of madness,
A turmoil begs for peace
Yet naught to be found
As the darkness seeps further,
Creeping endless in this crazed sense

Wings of steel,
Harsh and cold
Envelope in a solid grasp..
And pull..

The earth reveals it secrets
And I sink within..
To drown into the very depths of a hell
That speaks my name..
And beckons me forth..

Alone in the blindness
And fearful in the dark
It is a solitude that aches
Yet screams with a deafening roar to shatter all
It lingers,
Sadly
Unheard..
Unfelt..
Untouched..
Whispers of a silent tear
That trickle to the void
Leaving naught in its place.

For now is the day I drown
In hopes that tomorrow,
I will be reborn..

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Dave Morrison Comment by: Dave Morrison - 2006-01-26 13:03
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Dark, powerful; wild stuff happens when you dig deep.
denisedee Comment by: denisedee - 2006-01-26 03:35
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'Wings of steel,
Harsh and cold
Envelope in a solid grasp..
And pull..
The earth reveals it secrets
And I sink within.. '

love the mix of soft and harsh in this piece. love the title and it's possible dual meaning.
Comment by: - 2006-01-25 21:00
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I liked the poem very much!

Don
poeticdan Comment by: poeticdan - 2006-01-25 19:19
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The resolution is nice but I feel the poem can do with some editing. At places I felt the flow was not smooth. However, I liked the poem. :-)

Cheers

Dan
Whispered Words Comment by: Whispered Words - 2006-01-25 15:45
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Thank you!
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