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Feel your fear
Embrace it
It comes to you
Like a chill in the air
It thrills you
It draws you deep
Deep into my eyes
It gives you yearnings to run
To flee
To panic
Think of irony
Irony of being rooted
Opposed to fleeing
Frozen
Choke
Feel the words wrap around your throat
As you utter those words of no return
As you stumble to say to me
Face to face
For the first time
'I love you'
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I think this poem is fantastic. You totally nail that terrifying feeling of vulnerability you get when you know you're falling for someone and can't do a damn thing about it.
good point, the piece could go a number of ways, but at the time of writing I was in a bitter-sweet mood so obviously I chose the ending how it is because of that, but still I do like that thought, I do like to be open to such good crit, thanks.
This may be strange, but the thing I really liked about the poem is that the last line could have been "I hate you" and you wouldn't have had to change a line other than that. It would still have been a great piece of writing.
