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michaelovera
michael overa
United States, WA, Seattle

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OUTLINES
(originally published in Zygote in My Coffee)
by Michael Overa

I drew a square on the floor with pale yellow chalk, because yellow is all I could find. The chalk skipped over the seams in the hardwood, making small hiccups in the line.

There, I thought, I have a box.

Then I drew a line down the center of the box, lengthwise. I looked at the two rectangles. Then I halved the rectangles with a second line, this one running width-wise.

There, I thought, I have four boxes.

I tried standing with my feet placed in the boxes of opposite corners. Then I stood with my feet in adjacent boxes. I stood outside the large box and looked in on the four boxes. I knelt down and looked at the yellow dust. Licking my finger I erased the outside lines of the small box closest to me. I erased the sane outside lines of the box diagonal. Leaving only two small boxes touching at their corners. I redrew the lines and erased the corresponding lines on the other two boxes.

I'll redraw the lines, I thought, to see if the box has changed.

I redrew the exterior lines, and erased two of the smaller interior lines, creating one small box nestled in the corner of the large box. I colored in the small box with the flat of the chalk rather than the tip. The chalk made a deep sound as it rubbed over the boards, scattering more yellow dust. I stepped into the shaded box, looking down at my shoes.

I sat down outside of the box and took off my shoes and sox. I could still see the outline of my shoes in the yellow dust of the box. I could see the dust on the soles of my shoes. I stepped back into the box and the chalk felt dry and dusty, like baby powder. I crouched down and blew softly at the yellow dust. I looked out the window.

The wind is picking up, I said out loud.

Damp orange leaves pressed against the window.

Then I thought: I wish my box had blue lines.

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Koinonia Comment by: Koinonia - 2008-06-19 08:35
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'I erased the [sane] outside lines of the box diagonal'

Should it be 'same', or is the rest of the box crazy? I love the detail in this piece
jamietoth Comment by: jamietoth - 2007-06-28 20:55
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I like the tangible feeling you give to this (and the hook on the end line, too). It reminds me of a few times I've played hopscotch at work! I can't think of any suggestions to tighten it up, because it's extremely well written, concise, yet still fully realized.
DamitaPerez Comment by: DamitaPerez - 2007-06-25 06:11
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This reminds me so much of childhood when I would drawchalk pictures on the ground. I love your description. I never really thought that hard about chalk but now that I do you put your words together very well!
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