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OilsandSyntax
Nikki Niswonger
United States, Ohio

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The Gift

Paid for with the currency of time,
Many caffeinated nights
spent wading through the bracken
of childhood nostalgia
emerge like the layers of an onion
memoirs of a colorful past.
painted with oils and syntax,
watercolors and diction,
pastels and concrete imagery,
graphite and metaphor,
charcoal and irony,
until alas, the unveiling of completion
revealed the price tag of your tears.
Their salty splendor
stained my studio floor
with art.

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota Online- 2008-02-04 10:00
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'spent wading through the bracken
of childhood nostalgia'
What an amazing line - conjuring the texture, taste and smell of childhood - it says it so sweetly.

'until alas, the unveiling of completion
revealed the price tag of your tears.
Their salty splendor'

Gorgeous. This makes me want to express myself in poetry and prose...
Wonderful.
Comment by: - 2007-12-10 19:22
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Would be a really good spoken word piece.
Mrs Woolf Comment by: Mrs Woolf - 2007-12-07 17:38
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Majestic! That's the kind of poem I like. Balance between imagery and emotion. :)
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-12-06 17:00
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Very unique. I love your choice words, very simple and grabs reader nicely.

Many caffeinated nights
spent wading through the bracken
of childhood nostalgia
emerge like the layers of an onion
memoirs of a colorful past.

Luv the onion tears! Great job
BoyUninterrupted Comment by: BoyUninterrupted - 2007-12-03 17:58
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wow yeah, i welled up at the end there.

creation, CREATION!! and the ability to create is a wonderful, and memorable and you my dear have captured it eloquently.
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