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Yeah right
Emotions that run rapid
with the mind that tries to catch it.
All the constant changes
which go through many stages.
Led to one another
with all that we discover.
Comprehending something
out of everything and nothing.
Finding complications
along with obligations.
Now holding back on being you
for what the past has put you through.
The times they change and some are hard.
No doubt you'll win, you hold the card.
Never give up, always be you
just doing this is enough to pull through.
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| I like the sentiments in this, but you might consider for the opening line, Emotions that run rampant. It means sort of the same thing, but running wild. |
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i like this one too
very good rhythm
and great rhyming skills |
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Comment by: Susan - 2007-07-08 16:57
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| I like the flow and rhythm of your poem and the rhyming pattern, for instance, rhyming complications and obligations. It sounds almost as if it could be put to music. |
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| I think I can relate to this poem. I have issues with anxiety and it causes my emotions to run rapid. I think I try to hard to deal with life by trying to be something I'm not. Always forgetting that when we are nothing but ourselves, nature tends to pull us through. Good job! |
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