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She has patchwork
thoughts
random notes from her favorite song
flashbacks into whirlpool-smiles
sudden recall of instances yet to be formed
dancing her absences
through the hours
going back and forth between words and stones.
She collects
bits and pieces of spring
a happy, happy person, strong and
'well thought through'.
It must be exhausting, I say to her
this cartography of self.
She goes on coloring herself happy.
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Comment by: rabableo Online- 2007-10-19 09:43
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Wow! I really liked this. The end, to me, says quite a lot and has a sad feel to it. Well written and sructured.
Thanks for the read. |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2007-06-26 05:43
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Another lovely poem. The beginning is the strongest part I think, these lines are wonderful:
She has patchwork
thoughts
random notes from her favorite song
flashbacks into whirlpool-smiles
as are:
dancing her absences
through the hours
the end loses me a little, but I'm not sure why, and I may just need to reread this a few times. Beautiful writing anyway. |
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