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I can't sleep...really I can't. I'm thinking of what happened this morning.I'm with my friends at the gym, then someone went towards me and said something..I pretend that I don't get what he was saying but the truth was I understand it.That's the reason why for many days I'm out of myself..Maybe I felt guilty for doing that. but I don't have a choice.. sometimes we should do p retentions just to cover things that we know that won't work...sometimes p retentions means loving so much.... Maybe she can't see it but that's how I express my love...If they think that I'm so selfish for doing that..NO! I'm not ..even myself is hurting..but still I'm doing it.......
Maybe only time can say... if it can work ....
sometimes....pretending is the worst thing than loving...
but still many people do it..........
I don't know up to when I can hold this p retentions.............
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I don't think that this piece is ready to be published publicly yet.
This is a very good start. You know exactly what it is that you want to talk about and are sure of the emotion. You must now take it to the next level and format these elements into a structured well written poem.
Most great poems take time to write and sometimes rewrite. Don't feel you have to rush to get your feelings down on paper and published. If you know what you are going to write about and have a clear plan you should take your time and make it into the best piece that it can be.
I would do some more thinking on this one and approach it from a different angle.
I love the subject matter and would really like to see it in a narrative poem.
