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Sankylady20
Sarah Hopkins
United States

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The song,The story, And the Poem

She walks around on her infinite cloud,
With a sound so remarkable, that is has a pulse,
A sound so unique , that it breathes, and lives.
She is, the song. Singing the melody of I.
Beautiful piano, Beautiful arpeggio.
She is compassion to the 10th degree.
She is, the song. The glue of four.
Not always appreciated, But most definately adored.

She's so strong on the outside, Weak within,
Facing obstacles that exude love, and hate,
pain, and mistakes. But words continue to flow,
as she is the sun that shines.
She is, the story.
a 9,00 page novel you'll find hard to put away.
Beautiful words that hold your hand,
beautiful smile within each page.
Making you breathe easier, each day.
She is, the story. The light of four,
Not always agreed with, Incredibly adored.

She is a moment in time,
where true inspiration is found,
Greatness is formed with in her,
intense rhymes written about her.
She is, the poem. With words so strong,
they become a rock. Words of she, her , and I.
Rhymes of half a lifetime, as she is the poem,
she nurtures you. Beautiful metaphor,
beautiful haiku. She is the strength within us.
She is, the poem. The rock of four,
Not always tolerated, always adored.

And I, What could I be, as I am wandering through life,
scared and unique? Where amd I going to end up,
As I wonder and grow? Beautiful unknown,
Beautiful courage.
The song, the story, and the poem are within,
and I am the completion of four, not always understood,
hopefully, adored.
Yes the song, the story and the poem are three,
for this I am better, I breathe.
Because the song, the story, and the poem,
Love me.

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dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-11-07 05:30
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the descriptive nature in this piece of poem is uique.
you need to checkout some typographic errors thogh, aside that, I think it's completely flawless. I love your work
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-07-01 11:39
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Beautiful. This is a poem about inner processing and growth. About love of others that becomes love within one's self. Your language, your wonderful parallels, they carry me.

Did you know that you can edit and correct those nagging little errors? Like in the sentence 10 up from the bottom that contains "...Where amd I going to end up."

Oh yeah, and who am I to talk, but I think you can benefit by working on punctuation. I donno to whom to refer you, either. I have built myself some rules based on timing, the breath, and the hierarchy of meaning; so I suppose that as I read more of your work I will unravel your code. But convention does have its merits.
SherryGibson Comment by: SherryGibson - 2007-06-26 15:35
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Wonderful words of rhyme to describe you and your sisters and the relationships they have in your life. I enjoyed it totally! You have a wonderful descriptive writing style.
Sankylady20 Comment by: Sankylady20 - 2007-06-26 14:44
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This is about my three older sisters. I love them very much.
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