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The Flight Back
I am in love with you,
always have been.
Despite the water under the bridge,
the fire in the attic,
the way the building creaks
in angry weather,
my shutters throw themselves open
in anticipation of the warmth
from your sun.
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| very well done. I loved the line about the building creaking too, seems to have touched many of us in the same way. Thanks for sharing with us. |
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Comment by: esknapp - 2007-08-08 11:54
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This is beautiful in it's succinctness. The building creaking in angry weather but shutters thrown open in the warmth of (his?) sun really work.
Very good.
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| I've got to agree, "The way the building creaks in angry weather" is a beautiful line. This poem feels like strength, it makes me think of that quote, about being deeply loved giving you strength while loving someone deeply gives you courage. Not sure why, but it just feels that way. |
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| Thanks- that's a really amazing analysis of the poem. I hadn't planned to address those elements, but I guess they made their presence known, didn't they? :) |
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hello leslie,
as an introduction to you...'the flight back' shows me a woman who knows what love really feels like in all of its simplicity steeped in grandeur. i very much enjoyed this poem. lines 3-6 brought in the four elements: water, fire, earth, air...and very beautifully set up the last three lines which, to me, sounded like the fifth element: spirit. you may or may not have been trying to address these elements, but to this reader...you did and you did it well. |
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