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Time Untouched
It's been another one of those days, hasn't it?
Another in that long and drab procession
of days that never seem to change,
except that some rain harder and colder than others.
But there's something you've failed to notice
-- all of those bored days and wasted days,
those half-chewed-and-spat-back-out days,
days spent playing solitaire
or truant
or Devil's advocate,
those days you never thought you'd miss --
they're all gone now,
and gone too
all the things you might have done with them.
You could do them now,
if you chose to,
but you already know,
it wouldn't be the same.
It wouldn't balance the books
or get back even an instant
of the time you wished away,
the time you toyed with
and left uneaten on your plate.
Clouds pile up tenement-like on the horizon,
swollen with rain and unpaid bills.
You've been a spectator for too long.
Get in the game
or leave the table.
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| Very inspirational - fell right down my alley. "Get in the game or leave the table..." best line I've read in a while and great way to end the whole piece. I identified with a great deal of the feelings this expressed and your words were well placed, it was clever. Thanks for sharing and take care. |
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Hi Stevie. This is such a positive piece of grabbing people by the balls and saying it's time to live. For me, anyway, it's also saying that people dwell too much on days they have lost rather than gleaning something from them and actually building on those dog day afternoons. Fear eats the soul, motherfucker. Thanks for this. This has made my insomniac night. Why I have not read this piece before is anybody's guess. Hope you are doing well, Miss G.
Paul :D |
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| I like this alot.To me it speaks of stagnation or what happens when you chose to "not conform" or forget, or avoid joining the race.Nothing gets dealt with, the problems are still there but have grown.A little too much deja vu 4 me.Great imagery, and the last stanza is great. |
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Comment by: - 2007-08-03 08:46
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| Wow. the images are amazing. It makes me feel sort of sad and regretful and at the same time it's completely motivating. heh. Very moving! And this line: 'except that some rain harder and colder than others' is fab. |
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Comment by: chuntzu - 2007-07-29 17:35
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| I like the texture ofthe words. Very noir and gun metal grey. |
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