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In the Rush
Dry leaves in the
fresh cut morning,
and I'm off to rescue god
from tomorrow's diligence.
Tuesday bore the flashes of
another bombing as
Franz Liszt hammers meaning'
a soundtrack of angry delight.
Today's crimes stand more
importance to the experienced, but at
almost 30, I'm fresher than
warm placenta; yesterday happened
only in dreams.
And traversing the horizon of a mushroom
cloud, I yearn to taste Detroit's
pollution, rushing 80 miles an hour'¦
although I've never been.
Dirty snow will sometimes
sit easier than heroic myths
and evening news.
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Comment by: zepol - 2007-07-02 05:38
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| Jay, this is very interesting I can't really say anything that hasn't already been said. I like your last three lines, which so very true. |
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Comment by: AJSmith - 2007-07-02 02:00
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| This was a really interesting read. It read to me like an aside, an interim to the main body of your life, or your other work. It was like that quiet moment on your own before you surge into work or some event or other. Sitting in traffic with the radio on - that image is reflected in everyone i should think. Wasn't sure the final stanza was needed in the context of the poem, even though it was my favourite section of words. That and fresher than warm placenta which has such a visceral connotation to it. It's a word that brings the poem to earth. That one word grounds it. You're this 'one' human being amongst a whole. Evocative and enjoyable to read. |
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"Todayâ??s crimes stand more
importance to the experienced, but at
almost 30, Iâ??m fresher than
warm placenta; yesterday happened
only in dreams.
And traversing the horizon of a mushroom
cloud..."
I really like this. It conveys a sense of calm acceptance of reality and an unwillingness to dwell on the past which is, in fact, a dream, only a memory.
Good read. |
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Comment by: - 2007-06-29 23:34
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Iâ??m fresher than warm placenta;
I like the imagery this conjures. This is a really good piece of writing
Good work |
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Comment by: MaggieMay Online- 2007-06-29 19:41
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hey,
How's it been?
I love the opening to this. It just sort of falls right into place. The piece over all seems to be 'obeying' it's writer.if that makes sense.
"heroic myths
and evening news" -- awesome! ;)
peace,
MM |
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