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Frances
Frances Lennon
Australia, Victoria, Melbourne

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Dreaming

Shadows of a memory dancing
skimping'¦ fleeting thought.
Was it just a feeling
or the love, I always sought?
Soft wings, just like velvet
fluttering'¦ touched my very being,
Was it really love or lust, or
something in between?

Did you really lay with me
was it your warm flesh I felt,
Or just another dream of love
to make a hard heart melt?
AH! perhaps t'was just a fantasy
that my wishes were fulfilled,
Did you hold me as I dreamed you would,
or were my childish dreams'¦ all spilled?

Slowly I wake up to life
realize it's all a dream.
A fleeting shadow after all
love's intensity'¦ extreme
Embrace life's compensation's
for the promises not kept.
Forgiving that which can't be helped
a lifetime'¦ as I slept.

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Frances Comment by: Frances - 2007-07-02 16:31
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Thanks Brad for your really great comments.
xx
brad19 Comment by: brad19 - 2007-07-02 16:15
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There was something about this piece that was quite different from most of your works. It was quite striking and beautiful. The emotion shown throughout is powerful and gripping. A nice message lying within is excellent and altogether, this piece is fantastic.
Frances Comment by: Frances - 2007-07-02 15:55
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Thank you Brighteyes. I am so glad you liked it.
xx
brighteyes324 Comment by: brighteyes324 - 2007-07-02 07:34
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Rhyming and meter are suberb. Great emotion in the piece, allows the reader to feel what you are going through. So well written I think everyone can relate. Thanks for sharing. :)
Frances Comment by: Frances - 2007-07-02 04:56
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Thank you for the read and comments Arley.
xx
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