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A Rainbow ©
There was a rainbow in the sky,
beautiful colours to my eye.
Where do they start?
Where do they end?
I do not know,
I won't pretend.
The colours all light up the sky,
very pretty, I can't deny.
How does it come?
I don't know how.
I won't presume, I know somehow.
All I know is what I see,
It's so pleasurable to me.
So if you see one in the sky,
think of how,where and why.
Beauty in it's truest light,
oh! what a colourful sight.
To see a rainbow in the sky,
and I will always wonder why.
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Comment by: dlynn - 2007-09-28 20:48
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I was popping around again and thought I would read more of
your work. I really like this poem. I can envision it as
I read your words. Very nice. |
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this sounds an allusion to the famous poem The Rainbow by Wordsworth-
my heart leaps up
when i see rainbow in th sky
so was it when i was a chile
so it is now
when i'm a man
so it should when
i shall grow okd
or let me die
a chaid is father of man....
but your message is very clear, you believe, as Eliot belives, a thing of beauty is a joy for ever. when we see bautiful schenes, we get so engrossed that no thoughts float in the realm of our brains. so you say
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I do not know,
I won't pretend
.......
I don't know how.
I won't presume, I know somehow.
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| There is such a beautiful innocence to this piece, and yet again, like previous works, I love how this poem flows with such a rhythmic beat. |
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This would definitely be a great addition to a poetry book for younger readers, who, at a time of being asked to learn about their world, see such a wonder and decide the magic is best left alone and uncorrupted by science.
Great work!
~Dane |
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Comment by: solaris - 2007-07-04 01:58
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the child-like voice to this opens it up for the younger reader - as does the basic four-beat rhythm you have going on here. that helps a child remember the words more easily, since the intonation is one of those that lend itself to memorising.
like the way you capture the joy most experience when looking at a rainbow.
Beauty in it's truest light
your it's should be its
think of how,where and why.
missing a space in there |
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