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hatchzel
Hazel Bernardo
United States, New York, New York

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Circulus Vitiosus

Deep in a jungle forest
A babboon says to meerkat
"I wonder about humans.
They are interesting.
They walk on two feet.
with their noses up high
As if sniffing for food"


Meerkat scratches his ear
"You are wrong my friend.
Their nose is a signal
They are superior to us.
Noses are often different
They are made of plastic
And they pay highly for it"


Babboon picks a leaf
"Tell me, jungle pal
Why do humans wear
those funny leaves?
Pity that no fur
to keep them warm
in the bitter winter."


"You need to learn more.
Those are not leaves.
They are called clothes
It also tells them apart
They kill us for it
Much like fur around
their naked neck"


"That's awful!
They are heartless
Killing our kind
Are we food to them?
Will they take our homes
and wipe us out?
Are they our gods?


"Do not worry so much.
We will still thrive
Yet with difficulty
No, they are not gods.
They want to, I tell you.
They fight over it
I think they go to war."


Babboon eats a louse
"They also kill each other?
Is that for mating
or for partition of food?
I am scared of humans.
Not to be trusted
This world is unfair."


"Do not lose hope friend
When tables are turned
Humans will not survive.
They would die in days.
They think they figured
Out life fully on earth
But they are coconut heads."


"Coconut heads? That's funny!
I can't wait for the day
See humans fall on their knees
Walk on their four feet again.
Crawl on their belly for food
Eat insects like me, yummy!
And to be scared of us!"


Meerkat looks down
"No, I don't want that
The day they will fear us
Power is brought by hate
Humans live in contempt
If we aspire for fear
We are no different.
We are animals.
We have our own kingdom.
Humans have none
For they are divided.
If we want to rule
we become them, greed.
Vicious cycle begins
Killing each other
For power."



Babboon sighs at the sunset
"I heard enough about humans.
I saw a fallen tree by the river
I bet there are tasty maggots
for our sumptous meal, my friend
Humans probably came from maggots
What do you think?."

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prolificsantu Comment by: prolificsantu - 2007-07-10 21:28
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Meerkat looks down
"No, I don't want that
The day they will fear us
Power is brought by hate
Humans live in contempt
If we aspire for fear
We are no different.
We are animals.
We have our own kingdom.
Humans have none
For they are divided.
If we want to rule
we become them, greed.
Vicious cycle begins
Killing each other
For power

the summary is here in the above line. few years back i read a book by Maxim Gorkey, a famous communist author from Russia. the book was named "how I learnt to write" in the very small book he had written- had rats had a bit of wits, they could have formed dieties of their own and they would have termed the humans as satan. after reading your poem i could guess, i really felt that
almagemelas Comment by: almagemelas - 2007-07-03 05:29
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hey this could be a new edition to the "Plantet Of The Apes" Crudely Amazing Accurate imagery LOL!!!
AJSmith Comment by: AJSmith - 2007-07-03 00:18
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I liked this. It was well structured and developed at a nice even pace. There's a tone of naiveness about it which works well in the context. I was worried it would have some OTT ending, but i was pleasantly surprised. The line of humans coming from maggots was really good. Coconut Heads was funny as well. Enjoyable
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