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Subject and Painter (You needed to leave me alone)
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Subject and Painter (You needed to leave me alone)
Your stroke had touched me
benignly- but it became
downright affected.
You needed to stop
fussing with me constantly
and leave me alone.
As you got closer
I felt your exhausting breath
It set in on me.
You needed to stop
huffing on me heedingly
and leave me alone
I became tired
of being on your canvas,
I barely hung on.
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I think that this is excellent! "As you got closer I felt your exhausting breath
It set in on me." Reminds me of a nightmare that I lived with a very jealous - violent man. Good writing will wrench feelings from the reader (that's me). Thank you for sharing this, I loved it.
