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Yesterday (Tracey's challange)
Yesterday, I did nothing.
I did not choose a side and I did not throw myself into passions, great or small. I slept, and ate, dressed and went to the bathroom. I had my routine, which I find comfort in.
But I did feel something; briefly, when I saw you.
Nothing into something.
Yesterday, I.
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Comment by: hx - 2007-11-16 11:42
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I love how much the narrator reveals about herself through the things she didn't do yesterday (suggesting, I think, that on normal days, she might have done these). I also like the forlorn incompleteness of the last line. I'm a big fan of flash brevity, but I think this piece might have benefited from a few more words regarding who she saw, and what she felt.
In any case - nice work. Keep it up. |
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| Clever and deep. I probably didn't understand the entire meaning properly, but I figured it made enough sense to me. Your words are well chosen and I think it leaves enough open for the reader to draw his/her own conclusions. |
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Comment by: waxseal - 2007-07-09 09:26
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Tired :-)
THanks for the comments folks! |
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Comment by: mitra - 2007-07-08 03:25
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| Hmm.. these few words leave us to ponder much longer about ourselves.The question of "I" has an enormous scope. Great job. |
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Comment by: tcbswan - 2007-07-07 23:37
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| now this is really neat meleina--yesterday you were nothing living a life filled with nothing then after this chance encounter you have become--WOW! from nothing to: I (the essence of being). really deep! |
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