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milner place
Milner Place
United Kingdom, West Yorkshire, Huddersfield

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The highway man

The dust on his boots
a fine amalgam,
his wrinkles
an atlas
strewn with crosses.

He smells
of sunsets.

Where quetzals nest
he sings the songs
of ortolans,
spermiferous whales.

Leaves stroke
his cheeks.

He knows
the wind's indifference,
the cold hearths
of poverty.

Brine washes
in his eyes.

The moon
makes his shadow
sharp as ice,
on his journey
to the home of night.

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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2007-11-21 05:37
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So many wonderful visual, tactile images. I like poems like this. You've dipped into your imagination for images like a painter pulls colours off his pallet. and I do like "Rain kisses his lips" because it's self contradictory - it hints of loneliness and solitude, but rain is erotic. And somehow it says that nature approves of his predatorial lifestyle and kisses him on the lips.
milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-07-10 02:11
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You've nailed it there, kenneth. Been unhappy with those, myself. This better?

milner
KennethWelling Comment by: KennethWelling - 2007-07-09 18:30
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Really like the "his wrinkles an atlas strewn with crosses" and "The moon makes his shadow sharp as ice". You don't get images a lot better or more original than those.
"Rain kisses his lips" just doesn't have the same power of these others.
Liked the line break in "He smells
of sunsets". That's great.
Very nice to see you posting again Milner. Thanks.
milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-07-09 16:33
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Thanks, Wilton. A 'shiver' can be the greatest of compliments.

milner
Gecko Comment by: Gecko - 2007-07-09 04:55
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Beautiful... I got shivers reading it.
Very good short poem!
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