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| So many wonderful visual, tactile images. I like poems like this. You've dipped into your imagination for images like a painter pulls colours off his pallet. and I do like "Rain kisses his lips" because it's self contradictory - it hints of loneliness and solitude, but rain is erotic. And somehow it says that nature approves of his predatorial lifestyle and kisses him on the lips. |
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You've nailed it there, kenneth. Been unhappy with those, myself. This better?
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Really like the "his wrinkles an atlas strewn with crosses" and "The moon makes his shadow sharp as ice". You don't get images a lot better or more original than those.
"Rain kisses his lips" just doesn't have the same power of these others.
Liked the line break in "He smells
of sunsets". That's great.
Very nice to see you posting again Milner. Thanks. |
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Thanks, Wilton. A 'shiver' can be the greatest of compliments.
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Comment by: Gecko - 2007-07-09 04:55
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Beautiful... I got shivers reading it.
Very good short poem! |
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