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| I certainly agree with others comments on this, and more in that there is a depth of raw emotion that translates through the imagery! Well done for that! |
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Comment by: jjsmith - 2007-07-11 04:54
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comfort and wonder
is a special combination |
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| Thanks, I was stuck on that, but I think that would help. Thanks a lot for the advice. |
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| The imagery does paint a perfect picture. It flows nicely until the fourth stanza. Perhaps putting these together i.e. The magic and beauty; The confort and wonder; and ending the stanza with "That once was us." It would make if flow much smoother. it is a nicely written work. |
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Beautiful.
It paints a perfect picture. |
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