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mewzikz
Gordon Greene
United States, AL, Blountsville

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Bridge to Nowhere

Now my Soul and Spirit sinking softly as you speak,
Let me down so slowly, easy; if at all,
Cushion for emotional impairment,
Leave me feeling blessed for the fall.

As I hold the pieces of my shattered, broken pride,
You kiss me once so sweetly on the brow,
As you turn to leave I want to hold you one more time,
But I know it's over;

It's really over now!


I've never been the one to think forever is for real,
But wishing 'We' is all I've done so long,
Whatever will I do, now that 'We' exist no more,
I realize forever's not so long.

For you and I'

Forever wasn't long.

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SunShinee7 Comment by: SunShinee7 - 2008-04-06 09:14
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I like it. It seems like there is a battle going on in the poem. The only thing I would change is to make it a little bit longer. Longer poems are always the best.
chrisporter27 Comment by: chrisporter27 - 2007-10-21 19:08
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Damn. Very strong. I felt the heartbreak in this piece. Don't change a thing.
JoanneMitch37 Comment by: JoanneMitch37 - 2007-07-11 05:24
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Cool
brighteyes324 Comment by: brighteyes324 - 2007-07-10 21:45
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The rhyming pattern breaks in the second stanza. But I think this work might benefit from not bothering with a rhyming pattern at all. The emotion is strong and if freed from the rhymes could come through even stronger. Having read your other work, I know you write well enough to keep a good flow without the rhyme pattern.
KisaMogwai Comment by: KisaMogwai - 2007-07-10 21:41
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wow....you've written what i'm sure many of us have experienced at one time or another and been unable to express...

i love the flow of this and want to thank you for sharing with us what must have been an devastatingly personal experience.. i know it was for me..
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