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HypnoAthletics
Hakeem Alexander
United States, CA, Los Angeles

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Tall Trees

The trees are taller where the land is earlier.
-And if the trees are taller where a Knight has fallen;
There, I do not carry my lamp.

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Glen aka FAD Comment by: Glen aka FAD - 2007-11-06 17:20
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Seems almost an event of a war and the passing of time and the past, future of a fallen warrior and a marker to the trees as tombstones in a field of battle that tells the story one more, and that the light sheds no more of such event... Just my opinion of what I think is in your dream...

Glen Yumang Manese
Robert Barlow Comment by: Robert Barlow - 2007-09-15 19:56
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Hakeem, I like how this one really makes me ponder. :) --Robert
zayra yves Comment by: zayra yves - 2007-09-06 22:48
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It shows real talent to be able to describe more with less words and to convey the feelings or mood that surround those words. Brilliant.
HypnoAthletics Comment by: HypnoAthletics - 2007-09-06 17:51
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Came to me in a dream. I wrote it as the dream document read. I believe "earlier" may refer to an earlier time, thus trees on earlier or older land would be taller. Dreams are not the most "logical" of resources.
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-08-27 10:27
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I like the deliberate absences. I also agree with LScotto. Although "earlier" causes me to give pause, maybe an image could clarify. I thought "healthier" might be the word you ALMOST used, that would unify everything, but like you, I prefer "earlier". Still, there is a detail here I cannot find.
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