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mciheaustin
michelle austin
United States, florida, miami

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Sign Says

drive'n on the i-9 daily
I find myself rarely
know'n how I got
where I was going

exploring the caves
of my mind
some dark, some light
both are alright

they entertain me
tune on the radio
helps me be there
with my thoughts

until I pull
off the exit
and see them

sign says~I'm hungry

sometimes he makes
it to me and I give
him a little of what I got
hope'n he'll
get what he needs

sign says~ please-need work

sometimes I watch
as he goes from car to car
no one acknowledging
who they are

the down trodden
the lost souls

the ones who's outside
reflect our inside
the incomplete
searching for the whole

whether its a pipe you need
or you got big dreams
it seems not much different
to me

this life
economic strife
monies tight
people fight
for what's there

we are all scared
never knowing
what will come next

I feel vexed
them on the side
of the road with
their signs

save me
all you need is love
war veteran
have no family
starving
need job

I escape to the
darkness and light
of my mind and
realize we all are
fight'n the same fight

we don't want to accept
that we're no better
then them the ones
on the side~we gotta a ride
places to go

know'n that
we should show
a little
kindness
accountability
brotherly love

just for $.50
reach in your pocket

no judgement
whatever makes
them feel happy
for a minute

isn't that what
you need?

we are all in it
no better or worse
than the other

he wears his heart's sign
for the world to see

we deceive ourselves
and hide ours
cause we fear
the reprieve

we are all in it
for the same thing
the american dream
to get the fill of our needs

sign says
broken system
broken hearts
change things
fresh start

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ymh99 Comment by: ymh99 - 2007-07-24 09:24
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Michelle, I agree with Laura (brighteyes324) I also found myself singing this. It is quite musical. We have all seen the "signs" Great job!
fireflykid Comment by: fireflykid - 2007-07-22 20:51
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I like the disjointed nature you employ, giving a free-associative vibe, like you're freestyling. I picture you driving down the highway, just serenading yourself with your thoughts tumbling out like the highway before you. Nice!
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-07-21 21:37
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I like the poem itself, which is pretty strong from place to place, and I agree with your theme, and I think your last stanza is an easy A.

But I don't get "...we fear/the reprieve..." since reprieve means a relief from harm or suffering. Is it "reprise" that you are looking for? Reprise means (not to insult your intelligence) playback, chorus, karma, repetition.
Or maybe I don't know what you mean here.

Great heartsong.
brighteyes324 Comment by: brighteyes324 - 2007-07-20 05:59
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I found myself singing this more than reading it; such magnificient flow. I like the hopeful tone at the end; a fresh start. Great read!
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