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brighteyes324
Laura Shannon
United States, PA, Bedford

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The Fight

He drives home
Ready to forgive
Even forget

In the kitchen
He finds her
Wedding ring.

And weeps.

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Vision79 Comment by: Vision79 Online- 2008-05-01 13:10
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Wow! You've said a lot in eighteen words.
zepol Comment by: zepol - 2007-10-03 21:07
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Well done. Your few words convey so much.
brighteyes324 Comment by: brighteyes324 - 2007-08-18 01:20
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Thanks to everyone for their comments. Carrie...what an intriguing idea! I will have to work on that.
carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-08-17 08:32
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good job. I agree with everyone else, it is short but lots of emotion and a great story...maybe we could get a peek at her side of the story, too?
aliree Comment by: aliree - 2007-08-16 20:02
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Excellently portrayed in a short yet vivid piece
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