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nlinde
Nick Linde
United States, Nebraska, Lincoln

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Humble

Uncovered pages discovered beneath
A trunk of dust, forgotten--forgiven.
Footsteps washed away from an uncharted
Shore. The moon keeping its eye on
Erased embrace. Swallowed pride.

When the sun is off and the lights burned
Out. I pour myself into a mold of slumber.
Everything thought, felt--vanished.
Clap your hands, stomp your feet,
Anything, yes anything.

Hands of time are held tightly together,
Bracing itself for shadows of the now.
My faith in you, your disregard, a
Smile that wilts only slightly when
There's nothing left to say.

Voices of night send prayers.
Some answered, some not--I'll
Never know the difference. Your
Scent still lingers, your harmonies
Still resonate.

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kiexiza Comment by: kiexiza - 2007-07-29 18:39
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somy first trip to your page.. sorry it took solong.but i enjopyed my stay,... i willhave to check back into my editred site more often... thanks for this journey
finolala Comment by: finolala - 2007-07-26 13:23
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"Hands of time are held tightly together," Suggestion, I think 'clasped' might fit better than held and add to the double entendre of human hands and clock hands but it's just an idea.
Some great images here..
"Smile that wilts only slightly when
Thereā??s nothing left to say." Really liked that one.
Seanm Comment by: Seanm - 2007-07-26 06:35
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"When the sun is off and the lights burned
Out. I pour myself into a mold of slumber."
I agree - superb
TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-07-26 02:49
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There are some great lines in this poem:

"The moon keeping itā??s eye on
Erased embrace"
"I pour myself into a mold of slumber"
"Bracing itself for shadows of the now"

The pace is delicate and so is the feeling that washes over you.

I find that the last verse/stanza has a haunting quality to it that is beautiful:

"Voices of night send prayers.
Some answered, some not--Iā??ll
Never know the difference"
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