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ladytwigliot
Theresa Duddy
United States, California, Fresno

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Not An Addict

If I'm a drug, then feel these effects,
Shifting patterns of thought,
Removing your ability to concentrate,
Concentrate.
What do you what?
What do you want from me,
Your drug of choice?

And could I satisfy you?
Make you numb to the
Bitter pain inflicted by
A choice, more than
A whim or passing fancy,
But the long-standing sting
Of one who has craved for years?

And could you ever forget
The taste I leave in your mouth,
Forgoing the calming effects of
The euphoria I leave behind your eyes.
Are hallucinations phantoms,
If you live comfortably with them
Forever? I'll be your happy phantom.

And if you choice to quit this habit,
Will you still call for me
When she falls asleep,
This craving beneath your skin?
Or do we soon forget the things
We cannot see?

I am a drug, and feel these effects:
Nostalgia for the first moment
You felt my embrace, fondness
Of the first time you spoke to
Friends about what you feel.

Flashbacks occur constantly only
Increasing the your urge, of me,
I am your drug of choice.

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ripleym Comment by: ripleym - 2006-02-05 04:05
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Just like falling in love all over again; I really liked this. I have taken a few drugs in my time, and have fallen (still am) in love - the two are undeniably comparable.
denisedee Comment by: denisedee - 2006-02-02 04:40
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Good Poem. Like your rhythm. The second stanza wasn't as strong for me as the others. The other stanzas are about feelings and body and sensation and from the heart, the second one feels like it is from the head?
Comment by: - 2006-02-01 23:32
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I like this even more than 'My Garden's Gate' and I liked that a lot. Post some more poems!

I love the juxtaposition of the words 'hallucinations' and 'phantom.' That should be a title for a poem. Can you see it? 'Hallucination Phantoms.' I like it. Beautiful poem overall. Very sensual, very potent. I look forward to seeing more.
ladytwigliot Comment by: ladytwigliot - 2006-02-01 21:05
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This is spawned from a text message from Jeff, he sent me this message translated in english to, "you're like a drug." Fantastic. What every girl wants to hear!
Comment by: - 2006-02-01 19:16
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Wow, Tisa. That's amazing. And so perfect for me right now!! Still no word from him btw.
"Nostalgia for the first moment
You felt my embrace..."
Yup.
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