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| This is a good peac of work I enjoyed reading it. |
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| Happy New Year Louis-- this is a compact puzzle that reads like a heart under seige ( foreign, vengeance, revolutionary, break etc ). Makes me wonder why balance is being sought and what the narrator is awakening to/from, like a thawing out between lovers after a fight. Interesting as ever! Ash :D |
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| I don't think this poem will ever leave me satisfied.... Maybe it is time to let go... |
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| I see the potential of a good poem here, Louis. A bit enigmatic to me at this point, but certainly food for thought. I like the sound of the words you've used here. |
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| I note this is a translation, which I imagine must be damn tough to try! 'Encrusting' is an odd word, note really one that holds romantic connotations anyway. Do you mean something like smudging or dirtying? Also, I think 'its' shopuld be it's, as in 'it is so'? |
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