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lisalatourette
Lisa LaTourette
United States

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2 suitcases

now, frightened by birds and their songs of loss
bones carried like stones in a soft sack of flesh,
2 suitcases carry me home;
an equal mix of fate and defeat had their say
but as i leave my mind is stubborn and
remembers only the harmony of flawless seasons
taking place outside me;
even though the spring keeps coming
i still feel winter, blue smoke air in my lungs,
cold sunshine, blind and pale yellow
like the day we moved in and the truths we found here
are packed away, silent, but
i couldn't leave them behind if i wanted to.

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inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-03-31 14:08
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'...the harmony of flawless seasons
taking place outside me' - love the sense of isolation this line creates. Wonderful ending.
thisman Comment by: thisman - 2006-03-14 00:40
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all too many times have i returned home in this fashion, half broken and worn thin. very well written
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-03-06 13:19
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When I first read this I thought your body had been packed in two suitcases! Scary! Hopefully it was about someone who'd been away for a long time.
Comment by: - 2006-02-26 12:11
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A worn tired soul retuning home is the way I saw, defeated and clinging to the past. Deep and thought provoking is what makes this so good.
Matthew Eduard Abuelo Comment by: Matthew Eduard Abuelo - 2006-02-12 11:56
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The worst part being an ex addict is that, ones writing becomes transfixed on the emotion that comes with along with it. It is in fact not so unlike an amputee who still feels their severed limb, the phantom itch as it were. You use the image of winter rather well in this piece.
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